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The given diagram indicates information about how used glass bottles are recycled.

The given diagram indicates information about how used glass bottles are recycled.
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the diagram demonstrates the processing to recycle used
Use synonyms
bottle
Fix the agreement mistake
bottles
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 in
deffernets
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different
 stages.
Overall
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,
Bottles
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the Bottles
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 that
has
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have
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 been used
from
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by
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 the customers.
Then
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 into
other
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another stage
other stages
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stage
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 that need to be
clean
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cleaned
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 and
operate
Wrong verb form
operated
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 into the system for recycling. To start with, used
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bottle
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bottles
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 has been
seperated
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separated
 into recycling bins or the place that people
are
Unnecessary verb
apply
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storage
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storing
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 up to next the company or supplier who
are
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is
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 doing the
stage
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 for dedicated came
for
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to
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 collect
it
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them
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 at the
clloecting
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collecting
 point. Well, into
stage
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 two since collected all the
bottle
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 need to be
cleaning
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cleaned
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 up at
cleaning
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the cleaning
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 plant with
high pressure
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high-pressure
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 water,
then
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deliverd
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delivered
into
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to
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glass
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the glass
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 factory, once into the
facory
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factory
 all bottles will be crashed into pieces. After crashing down,
next
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the next
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 step is
furnace
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to furnace
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 with heat, the heat must be
in
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at
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high
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a high
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 temperature once
furnace
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the furnace
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 is done it
is
Verb problem
apply
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all
become
Wrong verb form
becomes
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 a liquid.
On the other hand
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, in the
last
Linking Words
stage
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 that when all
became
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becomes
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liqud
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liquid
then
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need
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needs
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 to go in through mould to become
new
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a new
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bottle
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.
At the end
Linking Words
 of
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stage
Add an article
the stage
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 for the
bottle
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tthat
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that
 can
be use
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be used
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 for the supplier or supermarket , we all
fiiling
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fill
 and
packing
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pack it,
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then
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 get
in to
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into
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selling
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the selling
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 system. well,
agian
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again
 once they all finished and now returning to
rcycling
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recycling
cycling
sytem
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system
 again.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bottle, stage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 1 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Recycling
  • Glass bottles
  • Collection
  • Sorting
  • Contaminants
  • Cleaning process
  • Crushing
  • Melting
  • Formation
  • Environmental benefits
  • Energy conservation
  • Landfill
  • Consumer participation
  • Sustainable practices
  • Recycled material
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