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the graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.

the graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.
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The line chart details four various transportation ways in the UK from 1974 to 2002. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is readily apparent that
the
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road
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 transportation had the most
used
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 and the pipeline
hold
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held
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 the least usage in the given period.
To begin
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 with, the
road
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 and the water have had the same pattern that as can be seen both of them have increased over the years. The
road
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 started at almost 72
million
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tonnes
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 in 1974 and continued to 2002 with a rising trend and ended
under
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at under
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 100
million
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tonnes
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. As can be observed the water and the
road
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 started at
the
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a
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 similar
point
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, at almost 40
million
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tonnes
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 in 1974, and were steady till 1978
then
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 their route separated. The water went increasingly until the
last
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 period, at 62,
whereas
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 the rail decreased
continusely
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continuously
 to 1994 and after that
has grown
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grew
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in
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at
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 its starting
point
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, at 40. The pipeline had the lowest
point
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 at
beginning
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the beginning
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point
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 at 5
million
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tonnes
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 and
grow
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grew
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 over the period steadily and ended at 21
million
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tonnes
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 in 2002.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, million, tonnes, point with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Transported goods
  • Quantities
  • Trends
  • Modes of transport
  • Rail
  • Road
  • Water
  • Pipeline
  • Fluctuations
  • Predominance
  • Economic influences
  • Societal changes
  • Technological advancements
  • Environmental impact
  • Growth
  • Steady increase/decrease
  • Comparison
  • Period (e.g., decade, years)
  • Examination
  • Implications
  • Analysis
  • Conclusion
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