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Introduction
Ensure the introduction clearly presents both views and your thesis statement, which will inform the reader about what to expect in the essay. Your introduction should more directly address the prompt and establish a roadmap for your discussion.
Body
Develop your main points with relevant and specific examples. Both your arguments for and against spending on cultural activities need to be supported with clear examples and evidence, which will enhance the quality of your argumentation and the overall task response.
Conclusion
In the conclusion, restate your thesis and summarize your main points. Conclusions should be concise and directly aligned with the content of the essay. Ensure that your opinion is clear and well justified with supporting arguments from the body paragraphs.
Coherence & Cohesion
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Task Response
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Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
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