The pie chart shows the online sales for retail sectors in Canada in the year 2005 & 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart shows the online sales for retail sectors in Canada in

the year 2005 & 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and

reporting the main features and make comparisons where

relevant.
The pie charts illustrate the proportion of items that were sold through online platforms in Canada in 2005 and 2010.
Overall
, it can be seen that
sales
of all other items increased except electronics and appliances and home furnishing, both
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declined. Electronics and appliances
sales
were 35% in 2005, which recorded the highest
sales
among other items, whilst food and beverages, home furnishing, and video games with 22%, 25% and 18% respectively.
However
,
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and appliances saw a slight decrease to 30%
as well as
lost their dominance in 2010. Demand for food and beverages saw a notable increase, which reached 32% and acquired its market leadership in 2010.
Additionally
,
sales
from home furnishing
also
dropped significantly by 10% to 15%.
Moreover
, it can be noticeable that
,
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there was a slight growth in
sales
of video games, which rose by 5% to 23%.
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