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The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagrams illustrate the ages of
populations
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the populations
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among
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of
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Yemen
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 and Italy in 2022 and forecast these portions in the year 2050.
Overall
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,
Yemen
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 had more younger citizens in 2000 and is predicted to be the same in 2050. Both countries will witness an increase in 15-59
years
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year
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 figures in 2050.
According to
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 the data, just under
a
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apply
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half
populations
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population
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 in
Yemen
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 were under 14 in 2000, compared to 14.3% in Italy at the same time.What’s more, the percentage of elderly, which
more
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 than 60 years old accounted for a mere 3.6% in total, lower than approximately a quarter counterpart in Italy. The remaining sector was populations from 15 to 59 years old,
Yemen
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 and Italy constituted 50.1% and 61.6% respectively. In comparison,
Yemen
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’s average age and over
60s
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the 60s
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 will slightly increase by about 2% and roughly 11%
whereas
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under
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the under
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 14s category witnessed a drop of a modest 20%.
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, by 2050, the number of oldest people in Italy will take a surge to well under
a
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half, leading to the reduction of the middle ages. As regards the remaining category, younger age in Italy will go down from 14.3% to 11.5%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words yemen with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • population distribution
  • age group
  • population pyramid
  • projections
  • young population
  • aging population
  • demographic shift
  • increase in elderly population
  • proportion
  • percentage
  • population dynamics
  • top-heavy
  • balanced age distribution
  • healthcare needs
  • pension provision
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