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This diagram illustrates the 2 different ways of how electricity is being produced from sea waves. The process requires the construction of a large chamber connected to a column with a turbine

This diagram illustrates the 2 different ways of how electricity is being produced from sea waves. The process requires the construction of a large chamber connected to a column with a turbine
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This
 process diagram shows how people get 2 types of electricity from sea waves.
Overall
, there are 3 stages to get energy from
water
. There are waves, motion of
water
 and air column As it is obvious, from
diagram
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 when waves go forward to the beach.
Water
 touches
chamber
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the chamber
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 wall and
water
 goes inside to room where placed turbine. It will happen because of
process
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the process
a process
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which
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apply
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called
motion
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the motion
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 of
water
. Which will help
water
 go
to
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apply
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inside
coastline
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the coastline
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. And there is one process left. Which
connected
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is connected
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with
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to
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generator
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the generator
a generator
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. The final part,
it
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apply
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is
way
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a way
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 to get energy. The room where places turbine
.
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is.
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 Kind
a
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of a
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vacuum where is going to happen air column.
In addition
 it
creats
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creates
 wind
to
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for
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generator
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the generator
a generator
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 and will make a circle and
creats
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creates
create
 energy.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "waves" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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