A healthy person is often described as someone who has a good diet, gets plenty of exercises and avoids stress. what should people do to stay healthy in your country? give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays, most
people
have started to realise the importance of
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maintaining
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health
. They should
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healthy food,
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plenty of
exercises
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exercise
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and
avoids
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avoid
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stress.
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essay will explain how a few
people
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healthy and give some reasons
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any relevant examples.
Firstly
, at
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people
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awareness
to have
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of having
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a healthy body. Even though they should go to work
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their
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always have
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time for exercise.
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,
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as we know have many supplements or healthy foods sold in the market.
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things
make
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citizens
feel
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easier
to get
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a halthy
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halthy
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healthy
life
.
For example
, some
people
prefer to
doing
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exercise before
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gets
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to work or after work.
In addition
, have many places
such
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gym
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that can
their
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visit or if they don't want to go
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gym, they can
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something at home
such
as meditation, yoga, or other
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similar
things
.
On the other hand
, another reason why should
people
do to stay healthy in my country is most
of
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the
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people
prefer to see someone with a good
bodies
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.
Have
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a good body should
to consuming
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some healthy food.
For instance
, if some
of
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the
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people
need to
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diet
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a diet
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their
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should
to
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consistant
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consistently
to
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eat fruit, vegetables, or wheat. That
food
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necessary
for
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to
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reduce fat in the body.
Furthermore
, in
this
era
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we quite often see
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instant
healthy foods that include some
vitamin
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vitamins
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or protein.
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things
can get
more
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apply
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essier
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easier
to get healthy bodies for some
people
. In conclusion,
have
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having
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healthy
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a healthy
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life
and healthy
bodies
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can lead to positive
things
.
That
is
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will make you more confident to enjoy your
life
. When we have a good
life
definitely we have a low stress level.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • balanced diet
  • nutrients
  • lean proteins
  • moderate activity
  • mental well-being
  • stress reduction
  • hydration
  • sleep hygiene
  • harmful habits
  • health check-ups
  • health education
  • local produce
  • seasonal produce
  • carbon footprint
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