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The table illustrates the projected costings during the five years in American dollars for three environmental strategies for stable forestry, whilst the pie chart presents the anticipated expenses distributed by four sectors in the first year.

The table illustrates the projected costings during the five years in American dollars for three environmental strategies for stable forestry, whilst the pie chart presents the anticipated expenses distributed by four sectors in the first year.
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The table shows three
environment
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 strategies for stable forestry
ini
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in
 American dollars which projected
costing
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costs
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 during the five
years
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, and
then
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whilst
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apply
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the pie chart illustrates distribution to anticipate expenses
four
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 sectors in the first
years
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.
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, it can be seen that of table 4
years
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 is the highest in
South-east
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Southeast
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 Asia.
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,
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 3 and 4
years
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is
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are
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 the lowest in Central America.
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, The pie chart
that
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of
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for
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 Salaries was the biggest. Meanwhile, Training and Office expenses were the lowest figure. Look at
details
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the details
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, Starting the biggest
data
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 which South-east Asia was in 3 and 4
years
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 at 50
million
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then
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3
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in 3
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years
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40
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at 40
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million
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 followed by in 1 and 2
years
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 at 30 and 20
million
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.
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, Central America began
in
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at 20
million
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 following year 2 at 12
million
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. And
then
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, in 3 and 4
years
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 were
the
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apply
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some 5
million
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. Regarding the
data
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 pie chart, the biggest
data
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 was Salaries at 50 per cent followed by Set-up Costs
that
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it
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which
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 was at 30 per cent. The
last
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,
data
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 was Training and Office Expense at 10 per cent.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, data, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 4 times.
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