The table illustrates the projected costings during the five years in American dollars for three environmental strategies for stable forestry, whilst the pie chart presents the anticipated expenses distributed by four sectors in the first year.

The table illustrates the projected costings during the five years in American dollars for three environmental strategies for stable forestry, whilst the pie chart presents the anticipated expenses distributed by four sectors in the first year.
The table gives information about the projected budget of 3 environmental
project
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for sustainable foresty in American dollars for the next five years,
while
the pie chart
ilustrates
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illustrates
the projected expenditure in the first
year
. In general, the total amount of money needed for the project
of
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each
year
always experiences fluctuation. Looking in more
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, the cost for West Africa's sustainable foresty keeps decreasing from
year
1 until
year
4, before it goes up to 3,5 million in the
last
year
. Central America's budget almost doubles
the
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West
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Africa in the beginning but
then
the number falls down
until
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5
millions
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the
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third
year
and remains the same for the rest of the period. As for the South-East
Asia's
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project, it needs 30
millions
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for the first
year
and 50
millions
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for the fifth
year
. As can be seen, the pie chart shows that half of the projected expenditure in the first
year
is used for
the
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salaries.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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