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The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The picture below illustrates the Australian teenager’s habit of fast food consumption between 1975 and 2000 years. It can be seen that the popularity of hamburgers rose significantly among
the
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Australian teenagers,
while
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 the fish and chips gradually decreased.
According to
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 the graph, in 1975,
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fish and chips were famous among
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teenagers
of
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 Australia.
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, it was eaten by consumption around 100
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 per
year
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. After that in 1980, the popularity of fish and chips declined consistently just over 83
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 per
year
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. But in 1985, it increased mildly about 90
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 per
years
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year
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.
Then
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 from 1985 to 2000, the demand for
this
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 fast food fell dramatically, just under 40
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 eaten per
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.
On the other hand
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, the popularity of hamburgers and pizza grew noticeably.
In
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 1997 to 1995, pizza eaten by
consumer
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consumers
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 surged speedily from 10
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 to 82
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.
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, the demand for pizza was unchanged over
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 period of 1995 to 2000 and it was roughly eaten 85
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 in a
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.
In addition
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, the consumption of hamburgers escalated sharply from 1985 to 2000 and the number of
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 eaten per
year
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approximately
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 100
times
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Vocabulary: Replace the words times, year with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • trends
  • consumption
  • type of fast food
  • popularity
  • peaked
  • hit a low
  • timeline
  • notable
  • switch
  • cultural trends
  • economic factors
  • marketing efforts
  • increase
  • decrease
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