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You received a letter from your friend informing you that his elderly parents are coming to visit in your area and he is asking for your on - which places they should visit - where should they live -invite them to do something with you

#friend #parents #visit #area #places #-invite
Dear John I hope you are well. I am writing
this
 letter to give
advise
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advice
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for
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to
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 you
which
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apply
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regarding
visit
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a visit
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in
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to
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Uzbekiston
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Uzbekistan
.I am flattered
that
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by
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 your itinerary. I think My town will like you. In my country have a lot of attractions,
historical
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and historical
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 places. If you and your family members agree, we will visit other places. For
instine
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instance
 Registon, in Samarkand,Oq
saroy
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Saroy
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, in Shahrisabz,
in addition
other
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to other
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 places.
Beside
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, All
at
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apply
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the region
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region
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regions
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 have
comfortable
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a comfortable
the comfortable
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hotel
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hotels
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 for
young
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a young
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 and old
person
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people
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. These hotels are cheaper than
hotel
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hotels
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 in
other country
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another country
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. If you want I can purchase tickets or visit the mountain at a time convenient for you.I am looking forward to seeing you.
Your
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Yours
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 Sincerely Jony
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Coherence & Cohesion
It is important to structure your letter in a clear and logical manner, using appropriate paragraphs for each point. Ensure that you include an introduction, development of ideas, and a conclusion.
Coherence & Cohesion
A range of linking words and cohesive devices should be used to connect ideas and paragraphs in your letter. This will help make the progression of thoughts easier to follow.
Task Achievement
Fully address all parts of the task prompt. Make sure all the points mentioned are covered and elaborated upon, with relevant details where necessary.
Task Achievement
Ideas need to be presented clearly and developed comprehensively. Ensure that each point is explained, and expanded on, to fully convey your message to the reader.
Task Achievement
Incorporate specific examples to support your ideas and suggestions. Examples help to make your advice concrete and actionable, providing clarity to the reader.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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