Some people today prefer to get advice online for medical problems and do not want to visit a doctor. Why is this? Is this a positive or a negative development?
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it will help to reduce the spreading of different kinds of viruses and different kinds of medial
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In conclusion, I would prefer that people
can get their medications without travelling to to doctor
because it will keep the patient relaxed and it will save money too, because we do not need to use
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