The line graph below shows US consumers' average annual expenditures on cell phone and residential phone services between 2001 and 2010.

IELTS Writing Task Chart for The line graph below shows US consumers' average annual expenditures on cell phone and residential phone services between 2001 and 2010.
The line graph depicts the average years of spending by US consumers on cell services and residential mobile services from 2001 to 2010.
Overall
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, spending money on cell services has increased a lot over
this
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time. And spending on residential phones has decreased significantly.
In addition
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, the lines met in 2006, when people started spending more money on cell phones than on residential phones.
Firstly
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, in 2001, we can see that people spend like 200 dollars per year on a cellphone service.
However
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, that increased a lot over time.
For example
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, it was 300$ in 2002 and grew to $500 in 2006. After that, spending increased more, raising $750 in 2010.
On the other hand
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, spending money on residential telephone service starts to be the opposite. At the beginning of that, people spent like $700 in 2001.
However
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,
this
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price gradually decreased over the years .
For instance
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, it went to 600$ in 2004 and
then
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to $500 in 2006.
Finally
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, in 2010, it decreased a lot to $400.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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