It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinino? What sort of punishments should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior to children.

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role in
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everybody life
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,
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not aware of bad and good surroundings around them . I
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agree with the statement that it is very important for
children
to know about the difference between good and bad
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and guardians or teachers can give some sort of
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if
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kids
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direction.
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them in
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environment and
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them some basic
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,
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upbringing depends on the parents and their actions in the future
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all about their good and bad
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time at work and
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not teach their kids
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how to respect elders and
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of good
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with others
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those kids in the future do not respect elders by not listening to them .
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make them learn those
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right
to do so that they do not find
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to build
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in the future.
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, teachers play
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of
children
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with each other in class and
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the teacher
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not
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any action
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it
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on
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children
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mental health and might
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up with
same
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behaviour
. Teachers need to teach them the value of good
things
and tell
to
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kidz
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kids
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what are the consequences of
the
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bad
behaviour
?
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,
teacher
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the teacher
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could punish
children
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for writing
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positive words in homework and teach them manners so
this
kind of punishment tells
children
to know
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about the
things
which are
right
and which are wrong.
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concluded that at
early
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stage parents and
teacher
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teachers
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has
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the power to teach them
importance
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the importance
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of the
right
things
and help them to avoid bad
behaviour
. Even
little
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little
things
make
big
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a big
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difference and help
children
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