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Students at schools and universities learn far more by lessons with their teachers compared to other sources (e.g. television, the Internet). Do you agree or disagree?

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knowledge
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 is wealth and one of the most common
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 to gain
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 is via schools and universities,
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 with rapidly developing technologies educational
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 has increased enormously. I completely agree with the notion of
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 ruling the academic pathway and I will provide
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 essay. The academic system at the schools and colleges
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consistantly
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consistently
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adverse effects on
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students'
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 performance. The efforts of the teachers in
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academic institutions are not 100
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 and they merely do their job
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 basis.
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,
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 recent research survey
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stated
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students
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 score high marks when the subjects are taught with
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 graphical presentation and in a concise form.
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,
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 brain is
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programmed
 in
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 a way that visual memory outweighs
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auditory memory.
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, with the
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 technologies and social media education has become more easily accessible and interesting.
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, during
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 period the
students
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 were solely dependent on youtube videos and educational apps
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, helping them to study with clear concepts and retain the
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 obtained.
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, the academic platform via
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internet
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 has helped
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students
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 to quit
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tuition
 centres, wasting time and money which had no effect on their scholastic
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performance
performances
.
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, there are enormous study resources
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 as past exam
questionaires
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questionnaires
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 and
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practice questionaries to prepare the
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 for the forthcoming exams easing their anxiety and stress levels. In conclusion, the
students
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 from universities and schools benefit from the internet which
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 the topics in a graphical presentation making it easy for the candidates to understand,
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 retaining the
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 obtained.
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, time management
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 life.

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