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6.The chart below gives the distribution of worldwide car sharing schemes (%) in 2008 and 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where necessary.

6.The chart below gives the distribution of worldwide car sharing schemes (%) in 2008 and 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where necessary.
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The bar chart provides information about the distribution of car-sharing operations worldwide namely between 2008 and 2016. It can be seen that North
America
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 had the highest percentage share of global car-sharing usage by the
year
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 2016,
while
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 Europe had decreased by the same
year
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. Interestingly, Europe had the highest usage of global car share in 2008.
In contrast
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, South
America
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, Australia, and Asia had a very low proportion of global car sharing in both years.
According to
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 the figures, North
America
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 significantly increased their share by 20% from approximately an initial 30% to 50% by the
year
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 2016.
On the other hand
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, Europe dramatically declined their percentage from 60% in 2008 to 32% by the
year
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 2016.
Although
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 South
America
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, Australia and Asia had minimal contributions, they all saw a slight increase at around 3% by 2016.
To sum up
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, North
America
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 had clearly become the global leader in car-sharing usage by 2016. It will be interesting to see what happens in South
America
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, Australia and Asia in the future as their markets grow.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words america, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Distribution
  • Global car sharing schemes
  • Changes over time
  • Geographical regions
  • Percentage share
  • Popularity and availability
  • Trends and policy impacts
  • Emerging markets
  • Diversification
  • Even distribution
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