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You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager, In your letter: explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months say how your work could be done while you are away ask for his/her help in arranging it

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Dear Mr. Brown, I am writing to ask for your permission
about relocating
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 to our head office
at
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in
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 New York City for six months. My wife will move to New York to spend six months of her training course in the central branch of her company. It would be great if it
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 be possible for you to accept my request and help me to accompany her. As you know, my whole work depends on my laptop and I will manage to do my projects from there.
In addition
, I would be able to gain some valuable
experiences
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 by working in a huge office like our head office
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 New York City. I would appreciate it if it would be feasible for you to pave the way for me and support my decision to move as soon as possible. I am looking forward
for
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 your prompt answer. Yours sincerely Ali
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task achievement
Be sure to fully elaborate on your reasons for wanting to work at the head office, including how it benefits both you and the company.
coherence cohesion
Work on developing a clearer logical structure by using a variety of linking devices and paragraphing effectively to separate different ideas.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professional advancement
  • cross-cultural collaboration
  • headquarters/ head office
  • global perspective
  • remote work
  • temporary assignment
  • team dynamics
  • networking opportunities
  • cultural immersion
  • succession planning
  • collaborative tools
  • time zone coordination
  • corporate hierarchy
  • relocation logistics
  • work-life balance
  • multinational environment
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