Some believe it is important for cities and towns to invest heavily in building large outdoor public spaces. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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As we are progressing

towars

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toward

development and well-built infrastructure, some people argue that increasing the number of outdoor public

spaces

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crucial

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investment, both in urban and rural areas. From my perspective, I totally agree with the argument since open access to public

spaces

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to environmentally friendly and healthy exercise for

inhabitant

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. In the beginning, building huge public accomodations,

such

park

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and

garden

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, can alleviate air

polution

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pollution

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unhealthy gasses; And

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over the areas and

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the warm weather.

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fresh

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environment which

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the resilience of the earth from climate change.

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that subject has many benefits, not only for people but

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the green infrastructures.

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indonesian

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government, if cities or towns provide plenty of green

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adults would prefer to hang out in

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rather than

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alone in their own

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the majority of their time playing in the fresh atmosphere;

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over there. As a

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both physically and

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in the top of the beneficial builds for many reasons.

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Relevant & specific examples

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272 words

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