the diagrams below show the life cycle of a spec ies of large fish called the salmon. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The diagram depicts the

life

of a

salmon

Overall

, it is clearly apparent that

salmon

life

cycle requires 3 steps that start with

eggs

and

culminates

Correct subject-verb agreement

culminate

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adult

salmon

. Turning to the details,

first,

adult

salmon

lays some

eggs

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the upper side of the river for about 5 to 6 months, the location

have

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has

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slow moving

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slow-moving

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current.

This

eggs

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egg

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hatches and

turn

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turns

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into

fry

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fried

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salmon

that

have

Verb problem

are

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3-8cm in size. They

life

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live

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lower

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the lower

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part of the river that

have

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has

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fast flowing current for approximately 4

years

. After 4

years

, they

turns

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turn

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into smolt or young

salmon

. It's about 12-15 cm. Young

salmon

life

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live

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in open sea for around 5

years

Furtermore

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Furthermore

, after 5

years

, smolt turns into

adult

salmon

Adult

salmon

have longer

body

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bodies

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compares

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compared

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to young

salmon

. All the salmons that have reached adulthood have the ability to

lays

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lay

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some

eggs

. They

lays

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lay

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their

eggs

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area that

have

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has

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reeds and small stones and all the

eggs

will hatch and

turns

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turn

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into fry or baby

salmon

This

process will

then

repeats

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repeat

show examples

over and over again.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words life, salmon, eggs, adult, years with synonyms.

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4Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
22Grammar mistakes
 

3 paragraphs

179 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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