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The table below gives details of world electricity production by renewable sources in the four years between 2009 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

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The table below gives details of world electricity production by renewable sources in the four years between 2009 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
The table depicts information about
electricity
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sources
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 by renewable energy, broken down into five different productions from 2009 to 2012. The figures are measured in
Trillion Watt Hours
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trillion-watt hours
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 (TWh).
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, it is noticeable that all of the
sources
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 had steadily increased
for
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electricity
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 production over
four
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a
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years
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four-year
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 period.
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,
hydraulic
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hydraulics
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 had the highest proportion for generating
electricity
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,
while
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 the lowest value was on solar energy. In 2009,
hydraulic
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hydraulics
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 achieved the biggest number at 3,329 as opposed to solar
sources
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was
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 the least at just 21.
This
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then
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 continually increased to the end of the period.
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, wind power had the middle contribution to
generate
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generating
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electricity
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 which
was
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accounted for 276.4, and
this
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 value
had
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remarkably climbed
in
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 the high point
at
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 534 in 2012.
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, biomass power contributed
at
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246.8 in the first year compared to the rest of the
sources
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 which had far
away
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faraway
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 value
at
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 67.4.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, sources with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Renewable sources
  • Electricity production
  • Significant growth/decline
  • Yearly basis
  • Specific figures
  • Stagnated
  • Regional differences
  • Anomalies
  • Unexpected trends
  • Implications
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