Childhood obesity is becoming a problem throughout the developed world. Because of this, some people think that adverts for fast food, sweets and sugary snacks should not be allowed in schools and colleges. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this? Give the reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Many people argue that

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advertisement

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advertisements

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for unhealthy

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as fast

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, sweets and sugary snacks should be prohibited in schools and

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campus

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is because there is an increasing number of children

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are suffering from

obesity

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because of unhealthy

food

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. From my perspective, I strongly agree that

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is one of the best options to tackle the issue.

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essay will examine why prohibiting some adverts could be beneficial to reduce the number of childhood

obesity

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and how

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can be done by the government. The reason

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the trend

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childhood

obesity

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these days is quite simple. Study reveals that more and more

students

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have suffered from

obesity

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because they

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attracted by some

food

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that

available

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on the board in the school. Many

students

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tend to do

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because they think that the advertisement has an appealing design and

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concession

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. Unfortunately, they are usually ignoring many considerations before buying

food

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, whether it is healthy or not

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.

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,

students

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are more willing to do

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again and

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condition

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to a negative habit that cannot be anticipated.

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, the government can alleviate

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issue through having a

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rule for the schools and

college

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in terms of advertising

stuffs

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.

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, not only schools but

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college

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cannot publish any form of advertisements regarding unhealthy snacks. If they are not obeying

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law, the government might give a severe punishment for them.

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, there is no chance for

students

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to gaze

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adverts. In conclusion, I firmly believe that the case of children

obesity

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is an important issue, and

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notion could be solved by having the

strick

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rule in terms of the adverts in

school

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schools

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and

college

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colleges

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