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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The histogram illustrates the outcome of a survey about the three preferences of some
people
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’s
coffe
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coffee
 and
tea
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 buying and drinking habits in
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last
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 four weeks in some Australian
cities
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,
such
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 as
Sydney
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,
Melbourne
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,
Brisbane
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,
Adelaide
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, and Hobart. It has three main figures, namely the percentage of individuals who bought fresh
coffee
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,
instant
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coffee
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, and those who went to a cafe for
coffee
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 or
tea
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. More
people
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 bought
instant
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coffee
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 than fresh
coffee
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 in all
cities
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. About over 52% of
people
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 in
Brisbane
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 and Hobart chose
for
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instant
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coffee
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, and nearly 50% in
Adelaide
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. Compared to it, the percentage of
people
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 buying fresh
coffee
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 was similar in
Brisbane
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 and
Adelaide
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, at around 34%,
while
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 Hobart's chart was higher, at roughly 38%.
Besides
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 that, the same trend is observed in
Melbourne
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 and
Sydney
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 at about 44% and 48% of
people
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 in both
cities
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 preferred
instant
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coffee
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 to fresh
coffee
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 at around 43% in
Sydney
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 and 42% in
Melbourne
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. The chart shows that Hobart’s
people
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 recorded the highest proportion who went to
cafe
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cafes
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 for
coffee
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 or
tea
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 in all the
cities
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, with a significant rate at 63%, closely followed by
Melbourne
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 and
Sydney
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 at 62% and 61%, and by
Brisbane
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, approximately 54% of the population went to a cafe for
coffee
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 or
tea
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,
while
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 in
Adelaide
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,
this
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 figure was around 39%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tea, cities, sydney, melbourne, brisbane, adelaide, coffee, instant, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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