Governments should ban dangerous sports. Others think that people should have the freedom to do any sport activity. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

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that it is

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necessary

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while

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opponents believe that

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participants

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any sport

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they are risky.I

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that people should be allowed to participate

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sport

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acticity

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activity

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essential to regulate and minimize the risks associated with dangerous

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the

ban

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of dangerous

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argue that these activities

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a significant risk to the participants's

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and bungee

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jumping involve high altitudes, which are risky

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may lead to injuries.

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sports

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as martial arts and boxing sometimes can cause severe life injuries

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as deaths.

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propenents

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proponents

may think that banning these

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would reduce the risk of injuries and fatalities.

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, proponents of the freedom to

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such

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sports

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argue that imposing

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restrictions

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might cause

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liberty as they have a choice to

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anything that they want. They believe that imposing

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ban

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human rights because person who participate

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in those

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sports

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make a sense of their achievement.To illustrate,

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red bull

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bungee jumping team

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calculated risks because they think that it

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full of achievement. So, I believe that governments should not

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dangerous

sports

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but should impose some regulations like age limits and

safety

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features to minimize the associated risks.To give an example, governments must set

safety

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guidelines, age limits, mandatory

safety

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equipments

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and

high quality

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professional supervision to ensure

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safety

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. In conclusion, if everyone has

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freedom to participate in any sport without any influence and nobody can

ban

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such

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sports

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everyone should

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of the value of their lives and they should be bound

with

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safety

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guidelines and wear

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safety

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the safety

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equipments

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equipment

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which

are

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required before participating any kind of dangerous

games

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coherence cohesion

Make sure to organize your essay into clear paragraphs - introduction, body, and conclusion. Use linking words to connect ideas and paragraphs for better flow. Avoid repetition and clarify your main points.

task achievement

Address all parts of the task by discussing both views and your own opinion. Your opinion should be clear throughout your essay. Expand and support your ideas with specific examples and explanations.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

298 words

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Governments should ban dangerous sports. Others think that people should have the freedom to do any sport activity. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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By punishing murderers with the death penalty, society is also guilty of commiting murder.Therefore, life in prison is a better punishment for murderers.

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Youth drug abuse is a serious problem. What are the possible causes of this behavior? Do you have any suggestion to control that?