Some university students are in favor of studying different subjects rather than focusing on one main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

Nowadays, university
students
are at the frontier of knowledge. A large number of graduates are in
favor
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of studying various
subjects
at
one
time,
while
some of them assert that it should be better to
adept
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only in
one
subject.
While
I believe that there will be more demand for highly expert individuals in the near future because of
rapid
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the rapid
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pace of technology, I am firmly in agreement with those who
wants
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to study different
subjects
simultaneously, because
this
approach
provide
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comprehensive
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prospect toward science. On
one
hand, it is true that the lack of experts in job sectors has become a persisting problem in certain countries. From my point, Those who are in
favor
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of studying
one
subject at a time should be prioritized underscores that there
would
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be
higher
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a higher
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demand for highly skilled workers, who
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are expert
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expert
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experts
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in a particular field, in the future than any other profession.
One
of the main
reason
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reasons
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for
such
a view is the pace of technology, meaning that computers and robots will be able to do all
sort
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sorts
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of
thing
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things
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, from engineering to baby-caring, so the world will need persons who are specialized
in particular
areas to do jobs that machines cannot. On
other
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hand,
majority
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the majority
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of university
students
argue that it is beneficial to study different
subjects
because
this
approach
increase
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creativity. From my perspective,
This
approach has many constructive impacts on educated people.
One
of the main
reason
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is that studying different
subjects
simultaneously gives a wider
prospective
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perspective
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to
students
, enabling them to understand the interconnected nature of science.
As a result
,
this
practice could increase creativity among university
students
, leading to new inventions or solving persisting problems like climate change. In conclusion,
students
play an important role in shaping
world's
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future.
while
some
students
argue that specializing in
one
field is crucial because of
ever-increasing
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the ever-increasing
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use of technology in jobs, I believe that studying different
subjects
enable
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enables
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students
to tackle world's issues because it gives them the right viewpoint.
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