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The following pie charts and the table show how three countries (USA, UK and Malaysia) deal with dangerous waste. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below. You should write at least 150 words. Amount

The following pie charts and the table show how three countries (USA, UK and Malaysia) deal with dangerous waste. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below. You should write at least 150 words. Amount
#show #three #countries #usa #uk #malaysia #waste #report #university #lecturer #information #amount
This
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These
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 pie charts and table show how the
USA
,
Uk
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UK
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 and Malaysia manage
there
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their
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 hazard
wast
. To
being
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begin
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 with,
it is clear that
 the
usa
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USA
has
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had
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 the highest amount of dangerous
wast
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waste
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 in 2000.
as
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As
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 for the
waste
 products it
is show
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is shown
is showing
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 that plastic bags are the biggest
waste
 in all 3 countries, between 32 to 60 in million
of
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apply
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tons.and
majority
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the majority
a majority
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 of
USA
 toxic
wast
 get dump in
lnadfill
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landfill
landfills
 by 50%,
while
 in the
UK
 and
Malaysia
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Malaysia,
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 45% of it get
disposed
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disposed of
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.
Firstly
, 50% of
USA
waste
 products end at the landfill,
meanwhile
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meanwhile,
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 the
UK
 is the least country to use
this
 method.
Moreover
, disposing the toxic
wast
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waste
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 is
commonly
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a commonly
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 used method in the
UK
 and Malaysia by 45%. but, it is the least used way in the
USA
 . When it
come
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comes
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 to
Correct article usage
the bigest
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bigest
Correct your spelling
biggest
waste
 product each
countries
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country
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generate
Wrong verb form
generated
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 in 2000, plastic bags
has
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have
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 the highest numbers of
waste
compare
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compared
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 to
others
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other
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 products.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words usa, uk, wast, waste with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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