Fresh water has always been a limited resource in some parts of the world. Today, however, growing worldwide demand has made this a global problem. What are the causes of the increased demand, what measurements can governments and individuals take to respong to this problem?

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Your introduction and conclusion need to be more clearly defined and should explicitly address the question. The introduction should set out what you will discuss, while the conclusion should summarize the main points and restate your position.
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Your response is incomplete and falls short of addressing the full scope of the task. You must discuss both the causes of increased demand for fresh water and the measures that governments and individuals can take to respond to this problem. Ensure that your ideas are both clear and comprehensive to fully satisfy the task requirements.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • limited resource
  • global problem
  • population growth
  • industrial expansion
  • agricultural activities
  • urbanization
  • water conservation policies
  • water-saving technologies
  • infrastructure
  • wastewater treatment
  • recycling
  • public awareness campaigns
  • water conservation
  • mindful use
  • domestic use
  • sanitation
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