The charts below show the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Write at least 150 words!

The charts below show the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Write at least 150 words!
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The bar chart and table present the trend and percentage of various export categories between 2015 and 2016 from one
country’s
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countries
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.
Overall
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, the
exports
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exported
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products
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are dominated by petrol
while
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the lowest is from
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textile
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textiles
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,
also
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, all but gems and jewellery had increased their
exports
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export
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earning
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earnings
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. As can be seen in the chart, petroleum
products
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are
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the highest commodity exports both in 2015 and 2016
stood
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at over 60
billion
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dollars
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with just a slight increase of 3%. Engineered
good
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goods
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gain
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gained
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8.5% more in 2016
start
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from just beyond 55
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billions
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billion
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dollars
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to across 60
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billions
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billion
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dollars
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. Gems and jewellery dropped the export categories by 5.18% in 2016
although
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it still reached around 40
billion
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dollars
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. Moving on
other
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categories, Agricultural
products
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stood at over 30
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billions
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billion
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in 2016, close behind
from
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2015 at only
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an exact
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exact
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0.81% of
increase
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. The other
products
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are
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textile
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textiles
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with the most noticeable change of 15.24% more than the previous year,
textile
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gained roughly 30
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billions
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billion
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of
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dollars
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in 2016.
The
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Textile
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textile
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products
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had the lowest export earnings with just over 30
billion
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dollars
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and about 25
billion
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dollars
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in 2016 and 2015 respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words products, textile, billion, dollars, billions with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • exports
  • categories
  • value
  • percentage change
  • petroleum products
  • engineered goods
  • gems and jewelry
  • agricultural products
  • textiles
  • year-on-year comparison
  • growth
  • decline
  • analysis
  • implications
  • economic impact
  • trade
  • international market
  • statistical data
  • increase
  • decrease
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