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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line graph depicts how many metric
tonnes
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 of CO2
emissions
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from
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per
person
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 in four
EUropean
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European
countries
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 from 1967 to 2007.
Overall
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, during these forty years, CO2
emissions
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 in
Sweden
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 experienced a remarkable decline,
while
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 in Portugal, there was an uptrend in CO2
emissions
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. To be specific,
initially
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, the figure shows that each
person
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 produced approximately 9 metric
tonnes
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 of CO2 in
Sweden
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, which ranked second highest among the four
countries
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. Simultaneously, per
person
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 in the United Kingdom produced the highest CO2 at around 11 metric
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. After 1977,
although
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 both
countries
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 witnessed a downward decrease in CO2
emissions
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, the reduction of CO2
emissions
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 from people in
Sweden
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 was much greater than that in the United Kingdom, decreasing from 10.5
tonnes
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 to 5
tonnes
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 by 2007.
On the other hand
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, CO2
emissions
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 in Italy and Portugal started at 4.2 and 1.8 metric
tonnes
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, respectively, in 1967. Both figures increased gradually, with the former surpassing
Sweden
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's
emissions
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 in 1987, reaching 7 metric
tonnes
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.
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 to the other three
countries
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, per
person
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 in Portugal produced three times more CO2,
finally
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 reaching 5.9 metric
tonnes
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 by 2007, making it the country with the fastest growth in CO2
emissions
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.
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