Rich countries often give money to poorer countries,but it does not solve poverty .Therefore develop countires should give other types of help to poor countries rather than financial aid .To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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It is well known that almost all rich
nations
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help poor
nations
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.
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, some people think that it might not solve the property problems of poor
nations
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by donating
money
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, they suggest that developed
countries
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should provide other types of help to the poor
ones
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. From my point of view, I am not that opposed to donating
money
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, but it should be better
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other types of help. It is undeniable that donating
money
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by
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wealthy
nations
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to poor
ones
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can solve a lot of problems and can be effective.
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, there might be a temporary solution for poverty if they do not efficiently use that
money
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in property ways and
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that can be false hope for poor nation's citizens by suggesting that developed
countries
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will always help them with
money
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and they might not need to afford and they will rely on offering
money
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. And
other problems
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Another problem
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of
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with
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financial
support
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is that it can be fraud by not distributing equally to every needed
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.
On the other hand
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, I am strongly in
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of providing other types of
support
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such
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as health
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and investment in education for poor
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. Developed
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should provide a lot of hospitals and needed medicines to poor
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in that way the health systems will be
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a lot.
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, developed
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may be offering some kind of scholarships for outstanding students of underprivileged
nations
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, and
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they can provide training sessions for teachers.
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kind of
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will be more suitable for poor
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than financial aid. In conclusion, I strongly agree that developed
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should
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support
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other kinds of
support
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to poor
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than financial providing.
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