Some people believe government should spend money on building train and subway lines to reduce traffice congestion. Others think that building more and wider roads is the better way to reduce traffic congestion. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Unquestionably, every coin has two sides so
are
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the
people
. Society's
people
are divided into two groups and
therefore
,
the
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traffic
congestion
has become a topic of debate among individuals.
This
essay will compare and contrast both
of
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opinions
along with
mine which is in
the
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favor of the former view will be discussed in a sensible conclusion. Initiating with the points supporting
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opinion
which
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obligate
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government
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the government
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to put more effort
in
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public transportation development. The
people
who support
this
say that train and subway lines are efficient ways to reduce traffic
congestion
.
Moreover
, they can carry a
numerous
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number of passengers simultaneously and decrease
number
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of vehicles.
Consequently
, investing in public
trasnportation
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transportation
infrastructure
benefitially
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beneficially
beneficial
support
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demostic
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domestic
economy
due to
increased connectivity and eventually
lead
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to sustainable urban development by reducing pollution. On
its
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contrasting side,
people
who contradict the first opinion say that expanding road infrastructure is more efficient than investing in rail and subway.
However
, it could potentially lead to induced demand, which means that more roads could invite more cars, leading to similar or even worse
congestion
levels.
For instance
, in Saudi Arabia
people
mobile
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between
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one point to another by
cars
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. Recently,
Saudi
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the Saudi
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authoriy
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authority
has built a wider road and the
congestion
issue is not solved yet. Based on their latest report, the average duration between the
farest
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point A in the
norht
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north
and the
farest
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point B in the South
in
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Riyadh city increased
10
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% compared with 2014.
Therefore
, building wider roads can have a negative environmental impact
due to
increased land use and potential destruction of habitats.
To conclude
, I would like to state that,
government
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the government
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should invest
on
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developing and enhancing rail and train lines. Investing in
evlolving
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evolving
rail and subway lines would solve the traffic
congestion
issue.
Moreover
, it has other advantages
such
as economic growth and urban sustainability.
However
, it will depend upon the
midsets
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mindsets
mindset
of the
people
that which view they are in
favor
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of.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • public transportation
  • infrastructure
  • sustainable development
  • induced demand
  • urban planning
  • ecological footprint
  • car dependency
  • mass transit
  • connectivity
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