The diagrams* below show how glass containers, such as bottles, are produced and recycled.

The diagrams* below show how glass containers, such as bottles, are produced and 

recycled.
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The first flow diagram illustrates the process of
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container production, and the second diagram shows steps in the process of recycling used
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. We can see that
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is made using three main raw materials
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and that the manufacturing process consists of four distinct stages. It requires five steps to turn used
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into new
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products.
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the first stage
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the production of
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, sand, soda ash, limestone and other chemicals are mixed together.
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mixture is heated in a
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furnace at approximately 1500℃ to produce molten
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. The molten
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can
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be shaped, by blowing, to create the end products, namely
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containers.
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recycling begins with the collection of used
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products. The collected
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is sorted
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its colour
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and
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washed in order to remove any impurities. At the fourth stage of recycling, the
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is crushed and melted, and the resulting molten
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can
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be moulded to create new items.
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