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Most of the people send text messages rather than calling. Explain the reasons for it. Do you think sending text message is an advantage or disadvantage?

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Through
development
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the development
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 of technology, we have found two main ways to communicate long distance,
phone
 calls and
text
messages
. Both help us in reaching another
person
 miles away.
Although
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However
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, sending
text
messages
 may rather serve
a
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as a
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disadvantage in comparison to calling.
Text
messages
 may give people the wrong impression as we can interpret
it
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them
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 in different ways.
Phone
 calls were invented to help people communicate in an easier way. A call acts perfectly like a conversation, just without seeing one's expression. It is something adapted into phones and it has
also
 been elevated to video calls, it makes us feel like the
person
 we're talking to is right in front of us.
Text
messages
 simplify our communication. In
text
messages
, we are not directly conversing with our opponent. All we do is send texts and they will interpret the message themselves. As
text
messages
 don’t work
real
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 time, we are given time to think through our responses.
This
 aspect makes texting not feel like a real conversation. Both
text
messages
 and
phone
 calls definitely have their own perks. A clear distinction between the two is that through
phone
 calls, we can still sense the
person
 we’re talking to. Meanwhile,
text
messages
 only allow us to read the message given and we can’t really guess how our opponents mean the words.
Overall
,
long distance
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long-distance
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 communication is better held through
phone
 calls.
Phone
 calls provide us space to have clear conversations as we know we are talking to a real
person
. Texts may somehow feel quite robotic.
This
 may differ
according to
 the situation you’re in and what we want to achieve through the conversation.
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Task Achievement
You should ensure the essay directly responds to all parts of the task question. In this case, you did not provide specific reasons why most people prefer sending text messages over calling, as the prompt requested. Consider including clear and direct explanations that relate to the prompt.
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Work on developing a logical flow that progresses from one idea to the next, connecting them with appropriate linking words and phrases. The essay sometimes reads as a series of somewhat disconnected statements rather than a coherent argument or narrative. Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea, and that the supporting sentences elaborate on that idea in a logical manner.

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