Some people think that a car is the best way to travel in cities while others believe a bicycle is a better way to commute. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Nowadays, many
people
think that
car
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the car
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is the best option to
travel
in cities but some
people
believe that
bicycle
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a bicycle
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is the best way of going anywhere in the city.
Traveling
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Travelling
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through
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by
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cars
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car
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can cause
pollution
whereas
bicycles
are a
pollution free
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pollution-free
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source of
traveling
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travel
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and
also
contain benefits in daily life. From one point of view,
car
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the car
a car
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is a more comfortable convince, it
don’t
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doesn’t
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waste
our
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apply
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much time and we can reach
on
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apply
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our destination
with in
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within
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time, but
increasing
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the increasing
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concept
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the concept
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of using private
cars
could
also
cause
increase
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an increase
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in air
pollution
as well as
noise
pollution
will
also
increase.
According to
the survey,
World
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the World
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Health Organization revealed in 2022, that in Pakistan most of the
people
are using their private
cars
then
bicycles
or busses, which is the big reason
of
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for
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increasing environmental
pollution
in Pakistan
especially
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, especially
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in Lahore.
On the other hand
, many
people
think
bicycles
should be preferred
on
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to
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cars
because using
bicycles
could
decline
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decrease
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the ratio of air
pollution
in that country. It could be observed, that if a person is always using
bicycle
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a bicycle
the bicycle
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to
travel
, he is
physical
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physically
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fit
then
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than
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those who do not like to
travel
by
bicycles
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bicycle
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and
uses
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use
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cars
to
travel
. In conclusion,
although
car
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the car
a car
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is
more
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the more
a more
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comfortable source of
traveling
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travel
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but bicycle can make us more active and
decline
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reduce
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the
pollution
ratio in our
surrounding
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surroundings
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. In my opinion, we should use
bicycles
to commute because it have just benefits rather
then
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than
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using
cars
.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea and follows a logical sequence. Use cohesive devices appropriately but avoid overusing them.
task achievement
Present a balanced discussion of both views before providing your opinion. Make sure to fully extend your ideas with explanations and examples.

Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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