We cannot help everyone in the World that needs help, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries so what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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of
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people
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in other countries in the World
needs
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need

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to
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our help but we have to
concern
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about
needs
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the needs

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of our
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country
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country's

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people
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i strongly agree that we should
concern
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about our society.
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first,
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there
are
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is

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high
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the high

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reason
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reasons

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for
being agree
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agreeing

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with
this
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subject,
for example
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, our
country
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has
larg
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large

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investment
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investments

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like gas, oil,
natural
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and natural

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and national
sorce
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sources

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which was should
consumed
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be consumed
consume

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for
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by

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our own
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country
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country's

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people
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because they
dont
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don't

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have enough
money
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for buying
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to buy

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primary facilities for eating,
for
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example
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example,

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rice, meat and even various of vegetables like cabbage, tomato and potato
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, therefore,

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therefore
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that is
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natural
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the natural
a natural

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right of My own
country
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which authorities of
goverment
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government

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must spend
money
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for them.
At
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apply

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Second,
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i
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I

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also
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have
money
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instance for
being disagree
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disagreeing

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with
this
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matter it means that
,
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apply

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when are
losed
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lost

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investment of
country
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it is caused that industry and Introduction
dont
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don't

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work and many of Young
are
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is

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become too much unemployment
in
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as

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result
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the result
a result

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of we viewed to escape of Young to other countries and even
also
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is become steel a lot in the
country
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and unfortunately stress and concern about life are
bocome
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become

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very much. In
totally
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total

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many
of
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apply

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people
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in
World
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the World

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country
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else
needs
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need

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to support
of
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our
country
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which i strongly
believed
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believe

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investment
of
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in

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our
country
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only are consumed for
own
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apply

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our
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Use synonyms

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country
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country's

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people
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because individuals of
this
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country
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are very poor in
the
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apply

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terms of
money
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global interconnectivity
  • international cooperation
  • ethics
  • moral obligation
  • geographical borders
  • diplomatic relations
  • economic stability
  • global security
  • resource allocation
  • expertise
  • international aid
  • dependency and development
  • sustainable solutions
  • local and global initiatives
  • community resilience
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