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Band 3

We cannot help everyone in the World that needs help, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries so what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Some
of
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people
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 in other countries in the World
needs
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need
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to
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our help but we have to
concern
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be concerned
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 about
needs
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the needs
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 of our
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country
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country's
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people
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 i strongly agree that we should
concern
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be concerned
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 about our society.
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first,
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there
are
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high
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the high
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reason
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reasons
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 for
being agree
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agreeing
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 with
this
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 subject,
for example
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, our
country
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 has
larg
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large
investment
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investments
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 like gas, oil,
natural
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 and national
sorce
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sources
 which was should
consumed
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be consumed
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for
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by
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 our own
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country
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country's
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people
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 because they
dont
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don't
 have enough
money
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for buying
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to buy
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 primary facilities for eating,
for
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example
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 rice, meat and even various of vegetables like cabbage, tomato and potato
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therefore
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that is
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natural
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the natural
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 right of My own
country
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 which authorities of
goverment
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government
 must spend
money
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 for them.
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i
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also
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money
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being disagree
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 with
this
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 matter it means that
,
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 when are
losed
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lost
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 investment of
country
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 it is caused that industry and Introduction
dont
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don't
 work and many of Young
are
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 become too much unemployment
in
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result
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the result
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 of we viewed to escape of Young to other countries and even
also
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 is become steel a lot in the
country
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 and unfortunately stress and concern about life are
bocome
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become
 very much. In
totally
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 many
of
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people
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 in
World
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the World
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country
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 else
needs
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need
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 to support
of
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our
country
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 which i strongly
believed
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believe
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 investment
of
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in
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 our
country
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 only are consumed for
own
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our
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country
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country's
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people
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 because individuals of
this
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country
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 are very poor in
the
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terms of
money
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 condition.

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Task Achievement
Your essay requires a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. Each section serves a distinct purpose: the introduction sets the topic and your position, the body supports your argument with explanations and examples, and the conclusion summarizes the discussion. Ensure that your essay is structured with these components.
Coherence and Cohesion
To better present your ideas, it is important to articulate them clearly and logically. Your writing should guide the reader through your reasoning and examples without confusion. Use linking words and phrases to join sentences and paragraphs, and make sure there is a clear progression of ideas from beginning to end.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global interconnectivity
  • international cooperation
  • ethics
  • moral obligation
  • geographical borders
  • diplomatic relations
  • economic stability
  • global security
  • resource allocation
  • expertise
  • international aid
  • dependency and development
  • sustainable solutions
  • local and global initiatives
  • community resilience
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