Some people believe that the best way to solve environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel for cars and other private vehicles. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In recent years, climate change
is
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one of the environmental problems. some
people
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insist that increasing the price of fuel for private vehicles can assist
solving
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in solving
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this
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problem. I partially agree,
rising
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price
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prices
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can help
reducing
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people to
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utilize their private transportation,
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, the most important is how the government provides reliable public transportation so
people
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would be more interested
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and
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help solving
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environmental issues. In
this
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essay, I will examine all the relevant arguments based on factual premises. It can be argued that increasing the fee
of
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fuel can
cease
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people
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to utilize
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their cars,
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, increased fuel prices might not significantly reduce consumption because of the lack of alternatives in transport.
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, it will create new
problem
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especially
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for low-income individuals who rely on vehicles to
comute
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commute
everyday
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.
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, increasing the cost without improving public
trasportation
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transportation
is not the best solution.
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structure
Ensure the essay has a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. The introduction should state the topic and your position. The body should develop your arguments with supporting evidence, and the conclusion should summarize the main points and restate your position.
cohesion
Work on logical sequence and paragraphs transitions to improve essay flow. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea and logically connected sentences.
support
Add relevant, specific examples to support your points and illustrate arguments. This adds weight to your essay and demonstrates an understanding of the topic.
task response
Fully address all parts of the task. Provide a more developed argument and a wider range of structures and ideas. Your essay should discuss both sides of the argument if you partially agree and offer a clear rationale for your position.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental sustainability
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • public transportation
  • carbon footprint
  • economic incentives
  • alternative energy vehicles
  • fuel-efficient
  • government subsidies
  • economic disparity
  • urban planning
  • rural infrastructure
  • sustainable development
  • carbon tax
  • green technology
  • demand elasticity
  • energy conservation
  • climate change mitigation
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