Although you are meant to present your thesis project in one month, your sister is getting married in Spain at the same time. You would like to change dates for your presentation. Write a letter to your professor. In your letter: · Explain the situation · Remind the professor of your academic achievements to date · Ask for a different date to present your thesis

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Dear Sir, I am writing
this
letter to request you to change the date of my science project that
need
Correct subject-verb agreement
needs
show examples
to be submitted on
24th
Correct article usage
the 24th
show examples
of January
this
month. As you know on the same date my sister getting married in Spain.
Howeover
Correct your spelling
However
, both sides of our
famlies
Correct your spelling
families
family
has
Change the verb form
have
show examples
done their planning for that day because it is already moved two times, and now
due to
family
Correct article usage
a family
show examples
emergency we all are decided. Suddenly, my grandmother is not well, and she is on
the
Change the word
her
show examples
deathbed right now.
Moreover
, as you know, I
gave
Rephrase
always gave
show examples
my best always into my presentation and got higher success in the class. So it will
be
Unnecessary verb
apply
show examples
continue and will not be affected by
change
Correct article usage
the change
show examples
the
Change preposition
in the
show examples
date.
That is
why I am requesting you to please convert my submission change
with
Change preposition
to
show examples
18th
Correct article usage
the 18th
show examples
of February
instead
of
24th
Correct article usage
the 24th
show examples
January
Change preposition
of January
show examples
. Look forward to hearing from you soon. Thanking You, Yours Obediently, Amit
Submitted by vmretail14 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

greeting and closing
Your letter lacks the necessary structure of a formal letter and is missing key elements such as the date, formal salutation, and a proper closing.
logical structure
The letter should follow a logical flow of ideas with clear paragraphs. The second paragraph is confusing and mixes the family emergency with the sister's wedding date.
complete response
Task achievement is not met as the reasons for requesting the date change are mixed and not clearly explained. It's important to clearly state the reason - your sister's wedding.
suitable writing tone
The tone of the letter is informal in places, using phrases like 'convert my submission change'. Ensure the tone stays consistent and formal throughout the letter, addressing your professor respectfully.
single idea per paragraph
Make sure to only include one idea per paragraph to improve readability and organization of content.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: