you have seen an advertisement from a couple who live in australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a yar. writte a letter to the couple. in your letter explain why you think you would be suitable for the job say what else you could do for the family give your reasons for wanting the job

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing

this

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letter regarding the advertisement in the village notice board

last

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Sunday. I am Jennifer Ramos, a student at

Melbone

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Melbourne

Universitty

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University

, looking for a part-time job when I saw your

advertisment

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I felt it is suitable for me. In your job advertisement

metioned

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mentioned

that you are looking for a bilingual person to teach your kids. I lived in France for 5 years with my grandmother,

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, I am fluent not only in

english

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English

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but

also

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french

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French

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. I am fully day available at

weekend

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the weekend

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but

weekdays

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on weekdays

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I can only come to your home

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for

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2 hours in the evening. As I am studying

post graduate

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postgraduate

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in psychology, I can provide you

some

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with some

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useful parental tips which will

beneficial

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be beneficial

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for your

child

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child's

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future. I have

experince

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experience

language

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a language

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teacher in Africa when I

was

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apply

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voluntered

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volunteered

for an organisation in my gap year. So, I

strogly

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strongly

believe that I will be suitable for

this

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post. I look forward to hearing

form

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from

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you. Yours faithfully, Jennifer Ramos

ck.manshadWed Jan 17 2024

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task achievement

Ensure you address all aspects of the task, including explaining your suitability, what else you can do for the family, and reasons for wanting the job, with sufficient development for each part.

coherence cohesion

The response should demonstrate a clear overall progression where all parts of the task are logically organized. Make sure you have an evident paragraphing structure.

coherence cohesion

Starting your letter with 'Dear Sir or Madam' is appropriate, but make sure you end it correctly. 'I look forward to hearing form you' contains a typo and should be corrected to 'I look forward to hearing from you.' Also ensure you sign off with a more formal closing appropriate for someone you haven't met, such as 'Yours sincerely' when a name is known or 'Yours faithfully' when it is not, ensuring to capitalize the 'F' in 'faithfully'.

coherence cohesion

Each idea should be developed in its own paragraph. While you have divided your ideas well, they need more development within each paragraph to ensure that each aspect of the prompt is fully addressed.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

171 words

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