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ACADEMIC THE CHART BELOW SHOWS THE CHANGES THAT TOOK PLACE IN THREE DIFFERENT AREAS OF CRIME IN NEWPORT CITY CENTER FROM 2003 – 2012. SUMMARISE THE INFORMATION BY SELECTING AND REPORTING THE MAIN FEATURE, AND MAKE COMPARISONS WHERE RELEVANT.

ACADEMIC THE CHART BELOW SHOWS THE CHANGES THAT TOOK PLACE IN THREE DIFFERENT AREAS OF CRIME IN NEWPORT CITY CENTER FROM 2003 – 2012. SUMMARISE THE INFORMATION BY SELECTING AND REPORTING THE MAIN FEATURE, AND MAKE COMPARISONS WHERE RELEVANT.
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The line graph illustrates the changes
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 crime in three separate areas in Newport city centre from 2003 to 2012.
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, the burglary rate saw a noticeable decrease throughout the 9 years,
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 the value of car theft and robbery tended to be stable with some fluctuations. The ratio of car theft remained steady until it eventually dropped by roughly 700 in 2006. It later grew with some fluctuations and ended at 2750 in 2012. Regarding the data
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 robbery, it started at approximately 700 and rose by 200 in 2005.
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 declined to 500 in the next 3 years. Afterwards, it remained stable during the
last
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 4 years with some oscillations. Meanwhile, the burglary experienced an increase of about 350 in 2004.
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, it
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 fell dramatically until 2008,
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 it reached only around 1150.
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 figure continued to fluctuate until the end of the time period.

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