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The rise of social media has affected personal relationships and society as a whole. Do the advantages of using social media for communication outweigh the disadvantages?

#rise #media #relationships #society #communication
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In the modern day, technology has developed rapidly, especially social
media
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, and it has affected society and its
relationships
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. Using social
media
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 brings more benefits for communication than disadvantages when it comes to human
life
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. Technology has developed dramatically day by day so communication between
humans
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 to
humans
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also
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 increased. Social
media
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 was invented to help
humans
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 find easier or more methods to keep in touch with others.
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, social
media
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 can grow human network
relationships
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. What's more convenient,
humans
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 can keep track of their family or friends to update their information about
people
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 around their lives. Increasing network
relationships
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 will bring more benefits for
humans
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 in reality, accidentally,
humans
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 can gain opportunities to increase
life
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 quality by social
media
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. Social
media
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 may help you in many fields of your study or work by sharing pieces of information
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about
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daily. Many
people
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 will share some tips or methods to help other
people
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 when they have a problem. Using social can help them update information about
life
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 without searching, especially, for
people
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 who aren’t fond of communicating
face
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 to
face
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 with other
people
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 or
people
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 who struggle with
life
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 and have some special condition.
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 the prop is useful and convenient social
media
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 brings for human
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. Spending almost all of the time just suffering on social
media
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 may cause a risk problem for
humans
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 like their communication or charisma skill will dramatically low and
humans
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 can lose their
relationships
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. More than that, they can easily get depression than other
people
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due to
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 they don’t have the experience to avoid the toxicity in social
media
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 or even in real
life
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.
To conclude
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, social
media
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 brings many advantages to human
life
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, human can get more opportunities to develop their
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, character or even
behavior
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.
But
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However
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 social
media
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 can cause a problem when communicating with other
people
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 when
meet
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face
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 to
face
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.

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task achievement
The essay addresses the topic but could be improved by fully developing all parts of the prompt. Be sure to clearly state if the advantages outweigh the disadvantages, and support this statement throughout.
coherence cohesion
Organize your ideas more effectively by creating distinct paragraphs for each main point. Use a range of cohesive devices and transition words to connect ideas clearly.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global connectivity
  • networking opportunities
  • real-time information
  • community building
  • marketing opportunities
  • self-expression
  • educational content
  • privacy concerns
  • data security
  • misinformation
  • fake news
  • cyberbullying
  • interpersonal skills
  • distraction
  • productivity
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