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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. *Fairtrade: a category of products for which farmers from developing countries have been paid an officially agreed fair price. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. *Fairtrade: a category of products for which farmers from developing countries have been paid an officially agreed fair price. You should write at least 150 words.
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These tables
depicts
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 the comparison between sales of
Fairtrade labelled
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Fairtrade-labelled
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coffee
 and bananas during
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the year
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year
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years
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 1999 to 2004 in 5 European
countries
. It is clear from the graph that all five
countries
 maintained
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an increased
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increased
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 only with
coffee
 for that period of years.
According to
 what is shown,
UK
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the UK
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 and Switzerland
were
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went up rapidly by 18.5
millions
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million
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of
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Euros
 and 3
millions
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million
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of
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Euros
 respectively,
while
Sweden
, Denmark and Belgium added slowly approximately 0.7
millions
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million
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of
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Euros
 for Belgium and 0.2
millions
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million
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of
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apply
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Euros
 for Denmark and
Sweden
 for 5 years of sales
coffee
. As for sales of bananas, only two
countries
were
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dropped
which they
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Sweden
 and Denmark by 0.2 and 0.1 respectively,
where
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whereas
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 the other 3
countries
 increased by
differ
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 amounts
in
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from
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 1999 to 2004.
To sum up
, we could say that the amount of
coffee
 in Belgium and
Sweden
 was
climb
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climbing
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.At the same moment, the amount of bananas with them decreased for 5 years.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, countries, millions, euros, sweden with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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