Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss both these views and give your own opionion.

In
this
globalisation era, travelling across countries is escalated to share thoughts, beliefs, and customs.
However
, whether the travellers should follow their own cultural norms or the place of visit is a matter of concern. I firmly believe that
people
ought to stick with
home
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their home
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country's norms because moving to
other
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another
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state does not
means
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mean
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forgetting
own
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their own
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rules. In the upcoming paragraphs, I will discuss both
phenomenon
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. To commence with, referring to local language, dressing sense, and food indicate that
people
are developing
sense
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a sense
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of belongingness. They can be trusted by residents.
Hence
, their learning ability will
enhance
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.
For example
, In
india
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India
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, it is seen that tourists from
england
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England
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came
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come
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every year to
know
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learn
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the historical history of Rajasthan and they learn more only
due to
speaking
of
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apply
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Hindi and wearing
kurta
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a kurta
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and pajama. Citizens believe that they are touched with their roots and it is safe to exchange thoughts with them.
On the contrary
, following own
culture
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cultural
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heritages
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heritage
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to another nation
indicate
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indicates
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cultural exchange. They transfer their views and thoughts
between
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to
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each
others
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other
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. It results
into
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in
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sense
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a sense
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of achievement. Without spending a penny
people
can learn about each other.
As a result
, they can convey messages easily.
For instance
,
due to
migration
people
from all over are residing in different developing places and reports are seen where every culture
respect
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respects
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each other and
celebrate
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celebrates
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their days.
Thus
, it will
benefits
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benefit
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to start new businesses too.
To conclude
, exchanging of own rules and regulations or adapting the another is
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a debatable
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topic. After
an
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analysis
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analysis,
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it is clear that
both have their own advantages but I concur that carrying own norms to other spot benefit more
such
as
development
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the development
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of new business and exchange of ideas.
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task response
To improve in task response, ensure that you address the prompt fully by discussing both views as well as providing a clear and well-supported personal opinion. You should aim to expand on your viewpoints with more comprehensive explanations and by consistently addressing the question throughout the essay.
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For coherence and cohesion, focus on organizing your ideas more logically and make sure that paragraphs flow naturally from one to the next. Use a range of cohesive devices appropriately and check for overuse or mechanical use. Additionally, work on varying your sentence structures to enhance overall coherence.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster mutual understanding
  • reverence
  • cultural clashes
  • peaceful coexistence
  • cultural immersion
  • authentic experience
  • cultural identity
  • enrich
  • pluralistic society
  • cultural exchange
  • tolerance
  • flexibility
  • international relations
  • global understanding
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