The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
The given table compares the opened date, route length, and total passengers per year of underground railway systems in several cities. From
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overview, it is obvious that London
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the first city that opened the system in 1863 compared with Los Angeles in 2001 which
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the most recent one. Based on the data, Tokyo has the highest number of users or 1927
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Paris with a slight difference which is 1191
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, and
in contrast
with Kyoto (45
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)
as well as
Los Angeles (50
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) where both numbers are not more than 50
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of passengers per year. More than that, the city of London has the longest route among all cities in the table which is 394
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This
number is approximately threefold higher than the other underground railway in Europe, or in Paris where it is only 199
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. The shortest route is in Kyoto, where the length is only 11
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in contrast
with the other railway in the same country, or in Tokyo, where it is 155
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