The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

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The given table compares the opened date, route length, and total passengers per year of underground railway systems in several cities. From

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overview, it is obvious that London

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the first city that opened the system in 1863 compared with Los Angeles in 2001 which

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the most recent one. Based on the data, Tokyo has the highest number of users or 1927

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Paris with a slight difference which is 1191

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, and

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with Kyoto (45

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Los Angeles (50

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) where both numbers are not more than 50

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of passengers per year. More than that, the city of London has the longest route among all cities in the table which is 394

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This

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number is approximately threefold higher than the other underground railway in Europe, or in Paris where it is only 199

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. The shortest route is in Kyoto, where the length is only 11

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in contrast

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with the other railway in the same country, or in Tokyo, where it is 155

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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3 paragraphs

179 words

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