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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

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The maps illustrate a public
park
 which was initiated in the second decades of
20
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centuries
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, in the past and currently. At first glance, it can be seen that the whole
park
 is modernized and just the rose garden in the north-west of the
park
 and entrances are remained without any alteration. By far
most
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 important change is
that
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the construction of
Amphitheatre
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an Amphitheatre
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 for concerts. In 1920, there were
the
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seats were existed almost around the
park
 but now they are located around the rose garden which is built in the middle of the
park
. Two rose gardens in the
south-west
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southwest
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, and
north- east
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northeast
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 of the
park
 were demolished and a new rose garden which
are
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 surrounded by the seats replaced
fountain
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the fountain
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. What stands out is that the old stage for musicians is
tor
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 down and a new Amphitheatre for concerts.
Furthermore
, the pond for water plants in the north-east of the old
park
 is demolished and a new area for playing cater to children is built.
Glasshouse
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 were demolished for the purpose of constructing water. On the commercial
side
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 a café is located in the north of the
park
 near the entrance and children's play area. An entrance underground car
park
 is considered on the left corner of the
park
 near the water feature.
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For Task Achievement: Ensure that you are providing a complete overview of both maps, including all major changes and developments. Some details have been mentioned, but the overview and summary could be clearer and more comprehensive. For a higher score, structure the information so that it is clear what has changed from 1920 to the present day, including key features and their purposes.
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For Coherence and Cohesion: Use a range of linking words and phrases to help your essay flow more naturally. The logical structure can be improved by using paragraphs to separate different ideas and providing clear topic sentences for each paragraph. This will help the reader to understand the progression of your descriptions. Remember to maintain a consistent tense throughout your essay, and work on organizing the information clearly, leading the reader from one point to the next without confusion.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • recreational facilities
  • landscaping
  • naturalistic
  • amenities
  • formal gardens
  • ergonomic
  • symmetric designs
  • inclusive
  • accessible
  • accommodations
  • native plant species
  • societal changes
  • visitor services
  • community events
  • evolution
  • modern playgrounds
  • wildflower meadows
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