Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for companies and organizations.
In recent decades, the majority of people prefer to run their own
business
, not work for companies. Fix the agreement mistake
businesses
This
essay will discuss the reasons of
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for
this
decision and drawbacks
of Correct article usage
the drawbacks
self-employed
.
On the Add a missing verb
being self-employed
one
hand, being reluctant to work for others has some rational reasons. For example
, despite the fact that having a 9 to 5 office jobs
offers a fixed monthly salary and some perks, it does not have flexible hours and employees cannot have Fix the agreement mistake
job
work-life
balance as they are trapped in a flexible timetable. Add an article
a work-life
Moreover
, there might not be a quick promotion prospects
and Correct the article-noun agreement
a quick promotion prospect
quick promotion prospects
stuff
have to circle around themselves and do some monotonous tasks. Correct your spelling
staff
Thus
, some of them may think that it isn't worth wasting a lot of precious time even if the job provides them with a
reasonable job security.
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apply
On the other hand
, despite several advantages that being self-employed has, it might have a few detrimental implications. One
of the main drawbacks is that running a business has a risk of failure and bankruptcy. By way of example, one
of my friends went bankrupt and loss
a great deal of money when he could not meet the Replace the word
lost
depts
of a number of big companies. Correct your spelling
debts
Consequently
, he ended up depression
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with depression
nervous
breakdown. Correct article usage
a nervous
Also
, sometimes failures might be the result of the lack of trying to use some methods to attract a target market or finding a way to sets
your business apart from others. Another downside of being your own Wrong verb form
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boss
,
you might have to bear a heavy Remove the comma
apply
work load
and be occupied and are not able to allocate time for your family and friends.
In conclusion, both Correct your spelling
workload
be
employed by an organization or a companyWrong verb form
being
,
and Remove the comma
apply
be
employed by yourself have some adverse influences and it depends on individuals' preferences to have the capacity Wrong verb form
being
of tolerating
which Change preposition
to tolerate
one
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