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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017 Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017 Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.
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The paragraph compares the amounts of tourists
between
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staying on
cruise
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ships
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 and staying on
island
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an island
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 in a Caribbean island from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
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, both the
number
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 of
visitors
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 staying on
cruise
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ships
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 and the amount of
visitors
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 experience a gradual increase over the period. From 2010 and 2012, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 staying on
islands
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the islands
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 rose gradually to 0.5
million
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, before declining to 0.25
million
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 in 2012.
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While the
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The
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number
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 of
visitors
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 staying on
cruise
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ships
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 remained constant at 0.75
million
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 from 2010 to 2012, after dramatically increasing to about 1.3
million
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. Between 2012 and 2017, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 staying on
islands
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the islands
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 kept constantly increasing, peaking at 2
million
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 in 2017. After a moderate rise from 2012 to 2013, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 staying on
cruise
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ships
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 experienced fluctuation at about 1.5
million
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 between 2013 and 2017.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cruise, ships, number, visitors, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Tourists
  • Caribbean
  • Visit
  • Graph
  • Summarize
  • Trend
  • Fluctuate
  • Peak season
  • Anomalies
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Comparisons
  • Sector
  • Significant
  • Patterns
  • Overview
  • Analyze
  • Data
  • Year-on-year
  • Percentage
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