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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks like now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks like now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
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These two pictures depict the floor plan in a public library over 20
years
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20-year
 period until now. There are a few differences in areas of the library.
Firstly
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, look into the Northeast corner, the children’s books
room
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 has been changed into a lecture
room
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. Getting out of that
room
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 door, you can see
the
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 the adult non-fiction books place has
got
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 replaced by the information desks and the
selfservice
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self-service
self service
 machines. In the middle of the ground floor, the tables and chairs
got
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 removed.
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in
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 the southwest side, the old reading
room
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 with
newspaper
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 and magazines has become the computer
room
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.
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last
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 but not least, the
room
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at
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 the left-up corner with CDS, videos and computer games
got
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 rebuilt into a bigger
room
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 with two sofas and children’s fiction books.
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, after 20 years the Central Libray got many noticeable changes between the rooms and
also
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 the expansion of the North-west
room
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words room with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • public library
  • undergo changes
  • reading room
  • central area
  • digital resources
  • physical books
  • collections
  • children's section
  • multimedia room
  • cater to
  • diverse needs
  • study rooms
  • private study spaces
  • reception area
  • modernized
  • shelving units
  • open spaces
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