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The graph below gives information about how teenagers (aged 12-19) in one state in the United States communicated with each other. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The graph below gives information about how teenagers (aged 12-19) in one state in the United States communicated with each other. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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The information in the graph shows the percentage of various methods of communication used by adolescents (aged 12-19) in
US
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the US
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. From November 2006 to September 2009. Essentially,
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the use
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 of text messages rose dramatically, calls on
sell
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cell
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 phones rose slightly,
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 the usage of email declined and talk face-to-face stayed the same. In 2006 calls
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on
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 cell phones and
talk-face-to-face
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face-to-face
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 were the principal methods of communication among US teenagers. Email,
however
, was little utilized. In
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the next
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 three years
situation
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was
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changed a little. The number of young adults who
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 emails as their way to contact other people fell from 15% to 10% in September 2009. Use of the text messages from 30% in November 2006 rose to the most common means of communication among teenagers in
US
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the US
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. The proportion of talking face-to-face fluctuated between 2006 and 2009.
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The use
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 of calls on cell phones reached a peak in 2007 at around 40%.
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