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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspaper or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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A significant number of
people
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 prefer to read online
books
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 than printed
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 nowadays.
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, few argue that nobody will buy physical
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 in the days to come. Personally, I strongly disagree with
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 because of several reasons that will be explored in
this
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 of technology and
internet
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the internet
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 has resulted
to
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 many things, one of them
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 the existence of
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books
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. Online
books
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or
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apply
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also
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 known as
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books
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 contain the exact same materials as the physical
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,
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however
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people
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 read
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 through online platforms like their phones, kindles or tablets. The only difference is the way
people
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 read it. So,
people
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 still have to purchase the book that they want to read and
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 its price is exactly the same as the printed version. Even though it is indeed easier for
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books
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 to get pirated, I found it very disrespectful
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 the authors.
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 that governments have become more strict regarding
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books
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 regulations these days.
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, they have removed several websites that
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 operated to give access
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to
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 the
publics
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 to download
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 freely and easily. On top of that,
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the majority
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 of
people
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 opt for physical
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 for sentiment and personal reasons.
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 say that the feeling they experience when reading
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 directly is different than reading them from their phones. It is more real,
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and intimate
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 and
give
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 a deeper meaning
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 proven by recent research from the University of California that shows 70% of its students are still collecting physical
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 and would rather read them rather than using any online platforms. Other than that, and as we all might already see often, bookstores are everywhere.
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 still visit bookstores frequently and they usually get
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 busy on weekends. Seeing that success, it seems like they will thrive even more and will open many new branches in the future. That alone already proved how much
people
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 are still willing to buy
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. In conclusion, physical
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 are still relevant and will likely
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stay so in the future.
E-
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books
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 only add more variety of options for
people
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 to read and in my perspective, it will not
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 the availability of printed
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 in any way.

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supporting details
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logical structure
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task response
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Technological advancements
  • Digital content
  • Environmental concerns
  • Tactile experience
  • Production costs
  • Distribution costs
  • Digital divide
  • Digital fatigue
  • Print media
  • Credibility
  • Permanence
  • Collectibility
  • Aesthetic value
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