In the future, nobody will buy printed newspaper or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

A significant number of
people
prefer to read online
books
than printed
books
nowadays.
As a result
, few argue that nobody will buy physical
books
in the days to come. Personally, I strongly disagree with
such
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because of several reasons that will be explored in
this
essay. The massive
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of technology and
internet
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the internet
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has resulted
to
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many things, one of them
is
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the existence of
e-
books
. Online
books
or
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also
known as
e-
books
contain the exact same materials as the physical
one
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,
however
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people
read
it
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through online platforms like their phones, kindles or tablets. The only difference is the way
people
read it. So,
people
still have to purchase the book that they want to read and
generally
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its price is exactly the same as the printed version. Even though it is indeed easier for
e-
books
to get pirated, I found it very disrespectful
for
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the authors.
Not to mention
that governments have become more strict regarding
e-
books
regulations these days.
For instance
, they have removed several websites that
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operated to give access
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the
publics
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to download
books
freely and easily. On top of that,
majority
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of
people
opt for physical
books
for sentiment and personal reasons.
People
say that the feeling they experience when reading
books
directly is different than reading them from their phones. It is more real,
intimate
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and intimate
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and
give
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a deeper meaning
overall
.
This
is
then
proven by recent research from the University of California that shows 70% of its students are still collecting physical
books
and would rather read them rather than using any online platforms. Other than that, and as we all might already see often, bookstores are everywhere.
People
still visit bookstores frequently and they usually get
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busy on weekends. Seeing that success, it seems like they will thrive even more and will open many new branches in the future. That alone already proved how much
people
are still willing to buy
books
. In conclusion, physical
books
are still relevant and will likely
to
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stay so in the future.
E-
books
only add more variety of options for
people
to read and in my perspective, it will not
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the availability of printed
books
in any way.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Technological advancements
  • Digital content
  • Environmental concerns
  • Tactile experience
  • Production costs
  • Distribution costs
  • Digital divide
  • Digital fatigue
  • Print media
  • Credibility
  • Permanence
  • Collectibility
  • Aesthetic value
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