The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart indicates the yearly spending
on
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the
school
by
United
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Kingdom in 2 decades. There are 5
catagories
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categories
which are mentioned here that what kind of stuff
were
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used in
school
to better education. During these two decades, the
school
spent the highest amount on teacher's salaries which was between 40% to 50%. In the year
of
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1981, 15% of the expenditure was spent on furniture and
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equipment and after 10 years, it
was
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decreased by 5% and in 2001, their expenditure
was
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increased which was 23%. For that reason, they had to increase expenditure
in
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insurance which was 8% in 2001
also
compared to the past it was increased by 6%. It can be seen that the supporting staff
who's
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salaries were continuously decreased in the past 2 decades.
Money
was spent on resources like books, 15% of
money
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the money
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was spent in 1981 and after 10 years it
was
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increased by 5% after a decade compared to 1981,
above
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the above
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percentage
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the percentage
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of
money
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was
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decrased
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decreased
by nearly 50%(9%).
To sum up
, it was good that
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spending
spendig
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spending
big amount
of
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the teacher's salaries
also
help
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for
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themselves and
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the student
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student
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students
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and increasing
spent
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the spent
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money
on furniture was
also
benefit
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for the
school
reputation.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words school, money with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Annual spending
  • Expenditure categories
  • Allocation
  • Trend analysis
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Budget allocation strategy
  • Inflation-adjusted
  • Future implications
  • Educational institutions
  • Technological resources
  • Maintenance and operations
  • Comparative analysis
  • Fiscal management
  • Resource allocation
  • Strategic planning
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