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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows annual water usage (in millions of cubic meters) by industries in some countries You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows annual water usage (in millions of cubic meters) by industries in some countries You should write at least 150 words.
#minutes #water #usage #millions #meters #industries #countries
This
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depict
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 the
manufacturers
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manufacturer's
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 needs for
the
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water
 per year in some countries. It is clear from the graph that the industries of chemicals are the highest
of
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using
ground
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groundwater
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water
by
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around 430
millions
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million
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of
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cubic meters.
According to
 what is shown, the manufacturers of chemicals and metal go to use underground
water
 more than
public
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the public
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 supply for their production about 190
millions
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million
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of
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cubic
meter
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meters
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 and 150
millions
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million
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of
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cubic
meter
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meters
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 respectively. As for foods or drinks and machinery, the gap
of
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 their usage of public support and
ground
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groundwater
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water
 is big enough by around 80
millions
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million
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 m^3 for foods/
drink
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drinks
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 and 90
millions
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million
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 m^3 for machinery.
To sum up
, we could say that
consume
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the consumption
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 of
water
 for both types of
water
 by industries to produce chemicals and metal is the
large
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largest
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 one
comparing
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 with the other categories
on
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in
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 that country.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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