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The graph below shows annual water usage (in millions of cubic meters) by industries in some countries

The graph below shows annual water usage (in millions of cubic meters) by industries in some countries
#water #usage #millions #meters #industries #countries
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 the
manufacturers
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 needs for
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water
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 per year in some countries. It is clear from the graph that the industries of chemicals are the highest
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using
ground
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groundwater
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water
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around 430
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millions
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of
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cubic meters.
According to
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 what is shown, the manufacturers of chemicals and metal go to use underground
water
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 more than
public
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 supply for their production about 190
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millions
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million
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of
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cubic
meter
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meters
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 and 150
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millions
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million
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of
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cubic
meter
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meters
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 respectively. As for foods or drinks and machinery, the gap
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 their usage of public support and
ground
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groundwater
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water
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 is big enough by around 80
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millions
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 m^3 for foods/
drink
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 and 90
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millions
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 m^3 for machinery.
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, we could say that
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 of
water
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 for both types of
water
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 by industries to produce chemicals and metal is the
large
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 one
comparing
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 with the other categories
on
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 that country.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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