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Task 1: The chart shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast-food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

Task 1: The chart shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast-food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The bar chart compares how frequently
Americans
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 ate in fast-
food
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restaurants
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 in three separate years (2003, 2006, and 2016)
Overall
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, the proportion of people eating in fast-
food
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restaurants
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 daily accounts for the lowest percentage in all three years.
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 most
Americans
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 went to fast-
food
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restaurants
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 once a week between 2003, and 2006, and once or twice a month in 2013. In 2003 and 2006, more than one-third of
Americans
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 ate in fast
food
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restaurants
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 once a week, but the number decreased to around 27% in 2013. The proportion of
Americans
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 who consumed fast
food
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 once or twice a month between 2003, and 2006 declined by an appropriate 2%, and 8% respectively.
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 increasing by 6% in 2013. The proportion of people who had fast
food
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 several times a week fluctuated between around 16% and 20%, and these percentages were slightly higher than the figures for those eating
this
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food
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 a few times a year. Daily eaters and people who never ate fast
food
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 accounted for very small percentages, ranging from just 3% to 5%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words americans, restaurants, food with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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