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The chart shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast-food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast-food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The bar chart compares how frequently
Americans
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 ate in fast-
food
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restaurants
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 in three separate years (2003, 2006, and 2016)
Overall
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, the proportion of people eating in fast-
food
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restaurants
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 daily accounts for the lowest percentage in all three years.
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 most
Americans
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 went to fast-
food
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restaurants
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 once a week between 2003, and 2006, and once or twice a month in 2013. In 2003 and 2006, more than one-third of
Americans
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 ate in fast
food
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restaurants
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 once a week, but the number decreased to around 27% in 2013. The proportion of
Americans
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 who consumed fast
food
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 once or twice a month between 2003, and 2006 declined by an appropriate 2%, and 8% respectively.
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 increasing by 6% in 2013. The proportion of people who had fast
food
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 several times a week fluctuated between around 16% and 20%, and these percentages were slightly higher than the figures for those eating
this
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food
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 a few times a year. Daily eaters and people who never ate fast
food
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 accounted for very small percentages, ranging from just 3% to 5%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words americans, restaurants, food with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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